*grin* I have to say initially I liked the other one better than this, despite not really getting it, because it just seemed to scan better. Then I realised I'd been thinking vul-nra-bil-i-ty instead of vul-ner-a-bil-i-ty and suddenly it worked. "Cackly crackly" is *brilliant*.
I have to say, the first lines took me longer to get just right than any of the rest of either of those poems! I just couldn't bring myself to write total nonsense or to use the boringly standard "higgledy-piggledy" opening, so I wanted something nonsensical and repetitive which actually had some bearing on the subject matter. I was quite pleased with Palpatine's, but Anakin's was much more difficult...
I have to say, the first lines took me longer to get just right than any of the rest of either of those poems! I just couldn't bring myself to write total nonsense or to use the boringly standard "higgledy-piggledy" opening, so I wanted something nonsensical and repetitive which actually had some bearing on the subject matter. I was quite pleased with Palpatine's, but Anakin's was much more difficult...