![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png) simont |
Tue 2010-05-25 09:43 |
The speech I was adapting is repetitive in that way: Vizzini infers various things in turn about Westley's mental processes, and ends each inference with "so I can clearly not choose the wine in front of me/you".
So yes, I hear you, it would have been nice to do some of the variation you describe. However, in this case, it came into direct conflict with retaining the sense of the source material, and I picked the latter. I'm not sure how I could have usefully added such variation without abandoning the whole attempt and writing a villanelle about something completely different instead. |
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